Are you criticizing? Offer. Impartial critique for Diaz's work

Diaz's work is about ideal country, where he described the main principles and values of "Idealstan". However his work did not mention life hacks to live in an ideal country.

Talking about coherence and cohesion, there was some embarassing moments with harmony of ideas and sentences. For instance, that fragment from his work: "Our population about 55.000 people and our geographic location is in Pacific ocean and country have figure of square. One side is of course ocean, second is mountains for safety, third is desert and fourth is canyon." He used about 7 linking words.

He used lexical resources on 6-7 ielts level and many words that relate to the topic of his work.